What about Food? came a quiet but familiar voice from behind the two.
Gehl!?! Russe exclaimed shocked that he had managed to catch up, What are you doing here?
Well Karna said I should at least try to go. I figured smelling you guys go might make me need to
Umm ok, Thats a little weird Gehl. Toboe said. But I think you should go back.
Why?
Were
uhhh
Toboe a little help with an excuse please
Toboe and Russe exchanged nervous glances. Several. Toboe not being able to think of anything else suddenly shouted out, WERE GOING TO FIND THE LAND OF THE MAGIC POTATOES!!!!
At that Russe smacked himself in the forehead He calls that and excuse. He might as well have said we were going to attempt to steal food from a brown bear or something. Were in the middle of a swamp
*sigh*
Gehl got the same puzzled look Russe had , Toboe are you alright? I dont think they have potatoes around here. They might in town
but here uhhh
Of course what was I thinking? Toboe said slapping himself back to his senses, All that we could find around here are coconuts and palm trees. ~?
Anyway ,Russe said trying to get off the topic of Toboes screw up, Were going somewhere thats too dangerous for you to go to. Well gather some food while you stay with Karna where its safer. Ok?
But wont you guys need Karna too? Gehl asked, After all we all are around the same age and
He dropped off being the shy kid he was.
Nah! Russe said with his normal look of pleasure on his face, Weve had more experience than you in the fighting/gathering food skill, so we dont need a mentor like Karna to show us the ropes anymore like you do-
He got mad at me for talking about potatoes
when hes making this sound like a RPG?? Toboe thought to his self while Russe continued his explanation.
Gehl apparently bought the explanation because as soon as Russe finished he smiled and said as he turned to walk back toward where Karna was, Oh OK! See you guys later then!
There was silence between the remaining wolf pups
until Russe spoke up , Toboe.
Yeah Russe?
Did Gehl seriously just buy the poor excuse for an explanation?
Yep. Scary isnt it
Wow, Whats really scary is that hes even more gullible than you X3
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Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, Sweet relief at last, Karna sighed as he walked back to the supposed meeting place. He was a little shocked when he only found Gehl waiting for him. Hey Gehl, Did you finally go? he shook his head, Well thats no good, speaking of which, Where are Toboe and Russe?
Gehl shrugged , I dont really know Karna. They said they were going to go look for some food because the sandwiches you have are yucky
Karna thought it was a joke at first and simply smiled and said, Oh really? And lemme guess they used this bathroom stop as an excuse to get away from me?
Yep! Gehl smiled back still believing Russes bluff about being perfectly safe.
Karna soon saw that Gehls face held to much innocence to be lying
his laughter faded and was soon replaced by thoughts of horror. He was about to start raving to Gehl about his mistake of letting them go. Nah, yelling at Gehls not going to solve anything. Its not his fault anyway
.I cant possibly find 2 kids in a swamp by myself though
. Especially if I have to haul along a trouble magnet at about the same age. I have to do something
.! BUT HOW THE HECK AM I GOING TO EXPLAIN THIS TO THE PACK??
Gehl, I need you to stay right here, in this very spot while I run ahead and get the others. Okay Gehl? You think you can do that for me?
Gehl looked a little shocked that Karna was asking him to do something like that. All the other times things had gone wrong on their journey Iris usually picked Gehl up and protected him from everything she could Why Cant I just come with you Karna? he asked thinking of Iris.
Im a lot older than you Gehl, More developed, and fast. But not strong enough to carry you on my back or anything like that. If you tagged along with me Im afraid I might leave you behind and lose you
.I couldnt live with myself If I was the reason you got hurt. He paused for a moment and to Gehl he seemed like the big brother hed never had, I might be tasking some dangerous shortcuts into the city. Jumping over wide gorges, entering rival wolf pack territory, and a bunch of other things you could get hurt in doing
.. Like I said I couldnt let you risk anything
so Gehl could you please stay right here for and wait for me to get back?
Gehl thought about it for a moment. He looked up at Karna he had a look of fear in his eyes. Or at least thats what it looked like. He was obviously very scared for The others and himself, Okay Karna, I think I can stay, he said with a look of determination in his own eyes, You wont take very long, will you?
Ill be going as fast as my legs can take me. Karna replied smiling and ruffling Gehls hair through his hat. So dont worry Ill be back ASAP And with that and a quick shift to his wolf form Karna dashed off keeping true to his promise to go as fast as he could.
It didnt take Gehl long to start feeling alone and vulnerable
. With every whisper of wind or a bird roosting in the trees would come another shriek and a running away. Thus he ended up inching further and further away from the spot Karna had asked him to wait. Sound after sound would freak Gehl out.. Eventually, he found himself completely lost. To make matters worse the sun was sinking lower in the sky. ( His lengthening shadow even scared him once or twice. )
Hello? Gehl said feeling a desperate need for comfort, Is anybody there? all that answer the little guy though was a lone cry from a crow
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*Further into the bog-like forest *
Are we ever going to find anything to eat Russe? Toboe wondered, I mean weve been walking around searching for hours.
I dont get it., Russe groaned, Were in a forest, if forest are truly the most bountiful of all places
WHERE THE HAY IS ALL THE FOOD. ALL I CAN FIND IN THIS FOREST IS PALM BRANCHES AND MUD! Good Greif.
Tell me about it, Toboe sighed, This mud has completely ruined my shoes,
Switch to your wolf form then, no shoes to worry about then.
No , If I did that mud would get in between my toes and squish together every time a took a step, Toboe shuddered, I dont know which I hate more the feeling itself or the feeling if makes
Thats the best part though, the feeling I mean. It feels like your walking through a giant bowl of strawberry jam or something. Mmmmmmmmmmm Jam. On Warm Toast with a piece of bacon wedged in the middle
.oh yum ~?
I thought you hated everything besides meat Russe?
Nah berries and stuff are good every once in a while, Russe Answered continuing to fantasize, Heck, even Karnas stinky sandwiches sound good when you get hungry enough. But, doesnt it sound good Toboe. I mean the berry flavour of the jam would compliment the meatiness without overpowering it
Mmmmmm
Doesnt it sound great?
Toboes stomach growled and his mouth began to water at just the thought, You know what would be even better Russe? A juicy steak on the rare side with a light side of A1sauce
.now that sounds good.
The boys fantasies were soon ripped from their minds when Russe spotted a shadowy silhouette moving throughout the trees past the clearing they had stumbled into not too long ago.
T-Toboe
is that you? Russe stammered hoping his friend had gotten ahead of him.
Is what me? Toboe asked coming up beside him.
You mean that wasnt you I j-just saw over there, He Said nervously pointing to the spot where the figure had stood.
N-no
Toboe replied his voice also beginning to shake, I thought that was you.
If it wasnt you
and it wasnt me
it must be
..a Sasquatch.
lolwhut? Toboe laughed nervously, Dont get too carried away there Russe. I mean its more likely something else. Like a deer or maybe its Karna and Gehl , I mean theyd have to start searching for us by now right?
I only saw one person, Gehl would be right on Karnas tail
. And there arent any deer in this region, especially at this time of year
The figure passed by again lots closer, but not close enough to make out much more, except for large projections sticking out of the unknown creatures head.
Still think its them? Russe squeak grabbing on to Toboes arm
No, that dream was just taken away
A-a-t least it cant be a Sasquatch or Darcia.
What if its an alien
and it kinds a way to unmask our human forms
then it dissects out our brains or puts probes into us and use their minds to make us their slaves
Or they use us as spies to take over the earth
Russe, you seriously watched too much television at the hotel we stayed at last week. -__- Anyways, Russe
.if something were to happen to one of us
. The other one of us should run and save their self.
No, Toboe I couldn't do that. No matter what we have to stay together, no matter who or what that thing is.
A large bush, not three feet in front of the brave duo rustled at about this point. Still paralyzed in fear neither boy even thought about running
they just started to scream. Strange enough though, when the figure came out through the bush, they screamed back, as loud if not louder and slightly higher in pitch.
ITS BIGFOOT!!! Russe Screamed, NO AN ALIEN!!
NO ITS DARCIA!!! I KNOW IT IS~ Toboe screamed.
To be continued........ In Volume 3














Comments
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*attempts to bend Steel like Kiba* "Man, My fangs are way too delicate for this"
typos I saw:
"Toboe not being able to think of anything else sudden shouted out,"
suddenly*
"He call that and excuse. He might as well have said we were going to "
calls*
"Toboe thought o his self "
to*
"Karna thought it was a joke at first and simply smile and said"
smiled*
"Nah berrys and stuff are good every once in a while"
berries*
:3
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"I love how I continuously use that word without knowing what it means" -Zules
"I love how I pretend to understand" -Logie
And thanks a million for pointing those out! They would have probably stayed that way forever if it wasn't for you
It seems people comment alot more on pictures on deviantART They need to make a Deviantext or deviantwriting or somethign for people like me. X33
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*attempts to bend Steel like Kiba* "Man, My fangs are way too delicate for this"
But yes, I think this is really really well written.
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Higurashi No Naku Koro Ni~
Friends will help you confess to a murder.
Best Friends will help you hide the bodies.
Satoshi doesn't sound like Len
He IS LEN 8D X3
I'll try again later.
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Higurashi No Naku Koro Ni~
Friends will help you confess to a murder.
Best Friends will help you hide the bodies.
Satoshi doesn't sound like Len
He IS LEN 8D X3
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"I love how I continuously use that word without knowing what it means" -Zules
"I love how I pretend to understand" -Logie
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*attempts to bend Steel like Kiba* "Man, My fangs are way too delicate for this"
But really you think so?
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*attempts to bend Steel like Kiba* "Man, My fangs are way too delicate for this"
But, hm...what does "V8ing" mean? You might want to make that clearer...
And....um...*looks through story again* Oh!
Wow, Whats really scary is that hes even more gullible than you X3
Russe, you seriously watched too much television at the hotel we stayed at last week. -__-
I personally would get rid of that "X3" and "-__-" unless that was intentional. I mean, it IS fun to use in chats but....yeah. I don't think you'll find that in an actual story.
Oh and....typos.
"things had gone wrong on their journey Iris usually picked Gehl up and protected him from everything she could"
"A juicy steak on the rare side with a light side of A1SAUCE .now that sounds good."
(Unless it's actually spelled "Sause"....I don't even know what A1Sause or sauce is....)
No, Toboe I couldn't do that. No matter what we have to stay together, no matter who or what that thing is.
...Or at least I'm assuming it's "couldn't"....
But yeah. I understand the typos. XD Everyone makes them and they're REALLY easy to make.
Hm...what else for critique.....you could be more descriptive I guess. :3 That's normally good unless you overdo it and go through every single tiny details and it takes like...two paragraphs just to describe one thing...yeah, not good. XD
But....seriously, I know it's just a filler episode, but the plot itself is VERY good. 8D
Oh, sooo...I'm running out of things to say. This comment is getting pretty long anyway.
But...here's some advice. The first time you write it, don't even worry about typos and being descriptive and stuff. Just...write. XD Then go through it a few times and make edits as you go. 8D That's what I like doing. :3
....I hope I helped and didn't completley spam you in the process. XD
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Higurashi No Naku Koro Ni~
Friends will help you confess to a murder.
Best Friends will help you hide the bodies.
Satoshi doesn't sound like Len
He IS LEN 8D X3
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